"Dear Sirs.
I am writing to you to ask about giving me the opportunity to visit Japan for my work experience.
I was raised around cars and motor sport, and my fascination with speed has inevitably steered me towards Japanese performance cars. My dad,infact is a Japanese car enthusiast, currently owning a Toyota MR2 Turbo.
The dream I have is to move to Japan and set up my own/partnered tuning garage, working with Japanese sports cars. I would obviously gain a lot of knowledge from visiting the country before hand. As you work around this area and have people based in Japan, I thought you may be able to help me.
I have basic mechanical know-how and I am currently rebuilding a mini for further experience, and hope to have a very nice car at the end of it.
I may have something to offer the Japanese tuning scene that has not been an option for many people as yet. Nothing is agreed, but I have connections with Arrow Race Engineering, this could prove to be a very nice way to get more parts to the people.
I can appreciate that you are very busy, keeping the business great, but your help and advice would be extremely useful.
Yours faithfully.
Jack Topliss (15 year old student of England) "
This was written a while ago, I may have done it slightly differently now, but it worked.
As you can see I kept it breif and tried to stay on subject.
Basically you just need to get to the point. Busy people dont want to read about the book youve just written when they have things to do.
Anyway, yea go for it Funkymonkey, that would be good.