what did u shoot that with... the white balance is shocking...
Few pointers tho;
* If you dont have an image stabilised lens you must use a tripod when it comes to video
* If the auto white balance is really shit, set a custom white balance as everything in your video looks cold the way it is now
* Nice editing job tho, it takes time and patience which you did well
* As mentioned watch the music levels, also watch out for the copyright on music when posted to share sites line vimeo & youtube you can have your entire audio track dumpped